Evaluation of first draft

Improvements

As a group once the first draft had been finished, we came together and evaluated what we could do to improve the first draft. We came up with a list of improvements we could make to the first draft. The improvement included:

• More titles are needed, as well as making them more creative, however keeping to the genre of a thriller
• The pans at the start is too quick and quite jumpy, therefore needs to be smoother and slowed down.
• The music is eerie and does create tension and suspense, however it does not match the narrative of our thriller.
• Throughout the opening sequence a few shots are shaky therefore a number a shots need to be re-shot to prevent the shakiness of shots.
• The mother character of the film is too young, therefore, we could change her character to being the little girl's nanny or elder sister.
• Throughout the opening sequence there are a number of awkward cuts, to improve this we could film a few more shots which would give the opening sequence more continuity.   
• The Narrative is confusing for the audience, however it works as a narrative, it just needs to be explained more to the audience so they understand how the little girl becomes possessed. 
• The shot of the possessed little girl is a good shot, however it is too brief which is confusing for the audience, therefore the shot needs to be prolonged to make it clear what has happened.